Thursday, July 7, 2011

flaw

Daybreak

lonely speck astride

sunstreaked pane, grows hooves then mane

daybreak clattering


written for Haiku Heights, prompt "flaw"





J'Accuse

Strauss-Kahn hyphenate

J'accuse!!! maid's flaws daily inked,

her name: a soiled sheet


written for Haiku Heights, "flaw"



10 comments:

mindlovemisery said...

Oh wow this is amazing

twitches said...

I love your musical language!

Leo said...

quite beautiful thought :) thanks for sharing!

sandra said...

original!!

totomai said...

very lyrical especially the 2nd ku

SandyCarlson said...

These are wonderful. I like following the images that daybreak draws on a window. Daybreak is an invitation to dream.

And the other...the women always are at the worst end of these things.

bttrflyscar said...

fascinating!

© Westlander Poetry said...

love both of these pieces ... the last line on the second, her name: a soiled sheet is awesome!

SandyCarlson said...

Gabrielle,
Your prompt, "weed," comes up at OSI this Sunday, Sept. 4. Would you send me a poem by Saturday?

Rosie Gan said...

I love "Daybreak" Makes me graphically 'see' what you mean!
Rosie