Thursday, July 7, 2011

flaw

Daybreak

lonely speck astride

sunstreaked pane, grows hooves then mane

daybreak clattering


written for Haiku Heights, prompt "flaw"





J'Accuse

Strauss-Kahn hyphenate

J'accuse!!! maid's flaws daily inked,

her name: a soiled sheet


written for Haiku Heights, "flaw"



10 comments:

Anonymous said...

Oh wow this is amazing

mareymercy said...

I love your musical language!

Vinay Leo R. said...

quite beautiful thought :) thanks for sharing!

Anonymous said...

original!!

totomai said...

very lyrical especially the 2nd ku

SandyCarlson said...

These are wonderful. I like following the images that daybreak draws on a window. Daybreak is an invitation to dream.

And the other...the women always are at the worst end of these things.

bttrflyscar said...

fascinating!

beeguiler said...

love both of these pieces ... the last line on the second, her name: a soiled sheet is awesome!

SandyCarlson said...

Gabrielle,
Your prompt, "weed," comes up at OSI this Sunday, Sept. 4. Would you send me a poem by Saturday?

Rosie Gan said...

I love "Daybreak" Makes me graphically 'see' what you mean!
Rosie