Sunday, December 13, 2009

Red



Thank you Bobbie of Constant Current for this week's prompt, spider webs.





Red


From a crevice
in the molding
a tiny spider
smiled
like the sun

sometimes
she slept
or kept to herself
and we understood
we were alone

Then we would soap
each other’s hair
til it stood in peaks
and clap
the rippled flanks
til the dark
echoed
through them

when we were
comfortable
with each other
she padded
onto the soap dish
a tinkling arpeggio
of legs
we held our breath
so as not
to
disturb
a
thing

One day
red was gone
the months
trailed
each other
only the web remained
collapsing
into itself
like
a storm

22 comments:

Loch Rob said...

Very nicely written! Your little friend came and left with a subtle reminder left behind. Your poem outlines the journey so well. So it is with people we meet in life. I enjoyed this very much.

Beth P. said...

I really liked this, Gabrielle! Your intimacy with the web weaver says so much!

Thank you--

Anonymous said...

this is wonderful .... it was great to read...

Sherri B. said...

This was a fantastic read...a simple poem about a spider, yet it went so much deeper. Beautifully done!

anthonynorth said...

Beautifully intimate. Great words.

Amias (ljm and liquidplastic) said...

Oh this is an amazing relationship, enjoying each other, but careful of each others space --- a wonderful relationship, like life and death, creates perfect memories that life goes on past our understanding.

Beautiful poem Gabrielle, makes me smile.

SandyCarlson said...

This speaks to my heart like I can't even tell you. Thank you.

Amity said...

i could silently mumble to myself what a great poem you wrote...:)

an intellectual's work, indeed!

Jim said...

Oh Gabrielle, those spiders are so fragile and flighty. Choosing one involves common sense, divination, trust, and love among others.

Did you know people do have spiders as pets?
Google results for 'pet spider'
..

Tumblewords: said...

A lovely closeness here. A granddaughter had pet spiders in her room. She outgrew that. :)

Cloudia said...

Nice.


Aloha, Poetess


Comfort Spiral

Maggie said...

It sounds like you were one with this web builder.

Enjoyable read and the photo was outstanding.

Anonymous said...

Both of these are so well put-together, with all the delicacy of such a web... very cool!

Patti said...

Oh- those are beautiful! I loved reading them all- and the phot is just plain amazing! What a great post!

the walking man said...

Of the two I like the final acceptance without condemnation of time that has passed that you expressed in RED. Just a well flowing piece that strikes a soft hammer to a small bell.

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TomCat said...

Thank you. :o)

Anonymous said...

These are wonderful story poems. Thank you for visiting my blog and commenting on my poem. You are welcome any time.

Tammie Lee said...

you have a lovely way with words and life.

Unseen India Tours said...

Beautiful and lovely shot !! Nice words !! I Enjoyed the post !! Thanks for sharing.

Jukota said...

Ah, have been there, done that. Left with just the web, and more than once! Nice job!

Jeeves said...

Nice one