Thanks to Nathalie for this week's prompt, hesitation.
"Three things are good in little measure and evil in large: yeast, salt and hesitation."
-The Talmud
"I use my single windup, my double windup, my triple windup, my hesitation windup, my no windup. I also use my step-n-pitch-it, my submariner, my sidearmer, and my bat dodger. Man's got to do what he's got to do."
-Satchel Paige
Commas
she woke
to find herself
covered in commas
she felt accidental:
a prairie ransomed
to ameloid sprawl
reasonable doubts
sprouted
like freckles
on a fair day
a mother’s regular
hemstitch
whined
the little red book
preached
purity
she remembered
the night
she threw the moon out
she shook
like a cat
loose of bother
a laugh
took hold
in her withers
shaking like a sheet,
a freshly laundered sheet.
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About Me
- gabrielle
- I live in South Minneapolis with Chris, Emma and Sauvi. We make good trouble together. I am committed to living in such a way as to engender peace and social justice, ecology and sustainability, and cultural, spiritual and artistic expression and exchange. I am interested in dialogue about the core of the human experience.
13 comments:
Gabrielle, I am still smiling over your poem. Of course it is full of all nonsensical ideas.
My favorite is the last, from it I have decided that she is a horse. (Horses have withers.)
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I really enjoyed reading this. Great job.
Quite a hesitation...:)
yeah what that proverbial words you share are true especially the first one; "too much or less of three things are evil and good, respectively!
Thanks for sharing these words of wisdom!
"reasonable doubts
sprouted
like freckles
on a fair day"...happens to me all the time~ loved this!
Do I ever know about the reproductive rate of doubts -- reasonable and otherwise. I loved this... in a Lewis Carroll kind of way. Whimsical, but only on the surface. Look deeper and there's so much truth here.
PS: Was that the Little Red Book you referenced? 'Cause I"m having a hard time putting Chairman Mao together with "purity". At least in the usual sense.
Oh, and regarding your comment on my entry... you have no idea the number of revisions that one went through to get it to a point I could live with. Patience, or merely obstinacy? Sometimes they're interchangeable.
that is original...:)
Those commas can be a nuisance, can't they?
I have never read something so different and wonderful...loved the way it was written!! and absolutely loved the last para!
:-)
comma, a symbol of pause.. and more likely a hesitation
Great work with the prompt Gabrielle, tres original! :<)
Hugs, G
you are an incredible writer...
gabrielle...such vivid descriptions
as the same time gentle.
love the title of your blog.
Jim – Some days she is a horse. I love your sense of humor and playfulness.
fourwingshaiga - Thank you. So glad you like it. Thanks for coming by.
Amity – Thanks for your perspective. I included that quote because sometimes hesitation can be a good thing. Imagine a waltz without a hesitation step!
Patti – Those pesky doubts do seem to have a life of their own. Thanks for your visit!
Mojo – Hi! Thank you so much for your visit and your thoughtful response. Doubt seems to proliferate exponentially. This piece was an attempt to look at some of its sources. The little red book is a reference to any dogma which comes between us and our hearts.
I can well appreciate the grit and tenacity that went into your lovely piece. The result is delicate, fluid and seamless. Keep writing!
Sandra – Thanks for your visit. So glad you found something new here.
Stan – Yes they can be a bother... which is why she shakes them out in the sunlight with the rest of the laundry.
Aayushi – Welcome! Thank you for your kind comments. Those last lines came quite freely. I am so glad you enjoyed them.
Totomai – Thanks for stopping by. Sometimes those pauses can linger…
Geraldine - Thank you so much for your visit. I am happy you enjoyed the poem. Hugs to you and happy writing!
Mia – Hello and welcome! Thank you for your kind and encouraging words. So glad you had a gentle experience.
I love the delicate restraint you use in translating the erotic.
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