all that was
required
has been
fulfilled
that valedictorian moment
delivered neat
in a sweated glass
the sensible career
a ghostly frigate
passing
all that was
borrowed
has been
repaid
the moon
was my purser
your legs sprouted grass
a flock of nameless birds.
backward stroking
oaring deep
Written for OSI prompt, "try".
I am an overachiever. Not by choice, birth order or even temperament. It was a condition of survival.
Nourishment and protection were offered in exchange for a measured amount of success. You would feel it hard on the knuckles when you overstepped that invisible line that kept moving.
For this reason, “try” is a loaded word for me. I struggled with whether or not to publish this piece and once published, to explain it.
Steeping myself in your poems this week, I decided to push my inhibitions aside. As the sky slowly clears, I continue to discover what it means to try life openly and with a new depth of view.
12 comments:
"the moon
was my purser
your legs sprouted grass"
Love this stanza!
bring on the cawing
This is wonderful, so evocative. Excellent!
I can relate to this. I overachieved my self to pieces until I had no idea who I was or what I wanted. Then I became paralyzed by the fear of failure. So awful. And the ones who so wanted my perfection never offered a hand when I was in any kind of need. Alone, I chose my own road. And discovered I was human.
Thank you for posting this.
all that was
required
has been
fulfilled
So now spread your wings and find your own path. :-)
Loved this poem and thanks for sharing it and the explaination under it. Being so open can only make you stronger.
I agree to gautami tripathy.... I like those stanza.... Stay safe Gabrielle...mwah!!!
This is a beautiful poem...I am happy you decided to share this. The last two stanzas are stunning. Lovely, creative, and deep.
Well, opening up only opens newer avenues..new explorations can happen.. and life becomes so very beautiful.. and talented are always pressurised by the expectations from near and dear ones.. and that's makes them put more efforts in everything.. but breaking free is so much fun.. as Sandy said one discovers one is human .. so no need to try to be superhuman.. I salute your effort ,Gabrielle.
These were beautiful words. Excellent.
I resonate to your spare,
well chosen
words!
Warm Aloha from Waikiki
Comfort Spiral
A deep bow in respect of you and your ability to write.
Please have a good Sunday.
daily athens
so many wonderful lines in this poem ... beautiful imagery. thank you for sharing your truth.
I love this!!
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