Monday, March 21, 2011

pretty girls

Ooh girl, could you be any prettier
they corner her
in the corridor
5th and 6th periods
the pretty girls
in their skinny jeans

I mean, Could you be any prettier
they hiss through perfect teeth
those pretty words
form a fine spray
their tongues
do remarkable things
perform loop de loops
and curlicues
in fancy cursive line

Her normally competent hair
falls damp
across her brow
she hugs her pack
and the metal teeth
hold fast
their grooves
thank god
she slips out of her body
her face peeling
in filtered light
a wrapper
with blurry print

Written for OSI prompt, "sarcastic"


Ramesh Sood said...

This is eerie ending.. but then you weaved it and then wrapped it well..

Jingle Poetry said...

well done.

Teri C said...

Sarcasm can be so cruel but she saved herself. Well written.

The Write Girl said...

This is quite creative...I like the contrast of the pretty girl versus the unkempt girl. This is quite neat and can be interpreted in a few ways. Nice!

Aayushi Mehta said...

Scary. Excellent, excellent writing though :)

Amanda Moore said...

it is such a shame that this ever even happens but it does so often, this is right on target for the prompt and very well written!

anthonynorth said...

Powerful with an excellent ending.

SandyCarlson said...

Sarcasm is a kind of acid, I think. How it burns.

Christine said...

They learn early don't they? and we learn early to repel and protect ourselves. Great post.

Mad Kane said...

An excellent depiction of cruelty.
Mad Kane

Anonymous said...

ohh this makes me cry... being different and new i was bullied terribly in school... i never got over it...

Cloudia said...


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